Monday, October 18, 2010

Review: Moon Rising by Laurie Bowler

Title:  Moon Rising
Author:   Laurie Bowler

Genre:  Paranormal Romance
Formats:  ebook, paperback
Publication Date:  July 2010
Word Count: approx. 106,038
Page count on Sony Reader:  240
Print Length: 352
Source:  ebook provided by author

DESCRIPTION from Amazon: 
Marinette (Nessy) is half vampire and half human flees her maker Hervidor, the strongest of their kind and the ruler of the underworld of vampires. As Nessy flees to be able to live her life as she chooses, her vengeance for the coven Hervidor created, The Tellis coven rises to the surface as she ventures into unknown parts of life that she has never seen or experienced.

Hervidor has kept Nessy locked away for centuries, his taunting and those tauntings of his coven have made Nessy stronger and one day capable of fleeing his grasp. As she runs through the unknown woods with her thirst on high alert she meets Charles and his coven, their ways and teachings of the new world that Nessy hasn’t seen before are shocking and exciting to Nessy who quickly learns to adjust and adapt so she can easily walk among humans during both day and night. Nessy quickly falls in love with Charles and they seal the bond that will capture and seal them together for eternity, their love being sealed and both of them finding their mate to walk the earth for as long as either one of them shall survive the passage of time and the changes it brings.

With the threat of Hervidor constantly at their heels and Nessy trying to run and making that final decision to stand and face him in the fight that will decide her fate, the Gulon and their own pack of cats become involved Heracio (Hera) is Nessy’s biological cousin and decides to impart to Nessy the many family traits she wasn’t aware off as a human, her own self discovery becomes apparent as she too transforms into the Gulon creature. As the biggest and strongest of the Gulon and long ago destined to become their leader, Nessy hands over the reins of the leadership back to Hera, claiming the ownership is his by mutual right, mutual consent and adoration of his pack.

As Nessy tries to come to terms with the changes happening to her and around her, she continues to slide on the path of love, together Charles, his coven and Nessy make the final stand against Hervidor and the detested Tellis coven to banish them from the earth but will they succeed in banishing Hervidor and his coven?


Vampires.  Romance.  Vampire Romance.  This should have been right up my alley, but I had to give up on this one about 1/3 of the way through the book.  So sadly, this will be my first one-star DNF (did not finish) review and will only cover the first third of the book.

On the positive side, I think the story concept was okay and I also found myself interested in the Gulon characters (large cat-like shifters that hunt vampires) though I didn’t really experience enough of them in the time I had with the book to get a complete feel for these characters.  If there was one thing that might have encouraged me to stick with the book, it was seeing more of the Gulon. However, it just wasn’t enough to force myself through more of this book.

Now for what I didn’t like--unfortunately, it was almost everything else.  The writing style was awkward and I found myself constantly having to reread sentences or paragraphs that seemed nonsensical or poorly structured.  The grammar and punctuation appeared off to me. I’m no expert in this area, which is why I usually don’t nitpick on this much in my reviews, but in this case it jumped out at me on a regular basis.  Then there are the typos.  I experienced about 12 or more in just the first third of the book so if you factor that out to the rest of the book I can only assume there are considerably more to be found.  There were misspellings (or maybe just simply use of the wrong word) like “baited breath” instead of “bated breath” or “innocence” instead of “innocents”.  There was also an inconsistency I noted in Nessy’s eye color.  Early in the book Nessy is described as having black eyes and later they are “greenie-blue”.  At times I honestly wondered if this book received any objective editing. 

The main characters, Nessy and Charles, seemed one-dimensional and wooden. I felt absolutely nothing for them.  As far as the relationship between them, there was no romantic connection or spark at all.  Zip…Nada…Nothing.  The romance was completely underwhelming. The dialogue followed suit; it felt unnatural and stilted. 

The pacing of the book wasn’t too bad at the very beginning. I was pulled in at first, but it quickly slowed down.  Perhaps it picked up later but I wasn’t compelled to find out. As for the plot, I cannot speak much for that since I only got through one third of the book. I just couldn’t get past the poor mechanics and execution of this book.

Since I did give this book a low rating I looked for other reviews to provide a balance.  I was also interested to know if my review was in the general flow of traffic or if I was traveling down my own road.  I found quite a few reviews on Goodreads and a handful on Amazon (some appear to be cross-posted).  Well, color me surprised that this book had a high number of 5-star reviews.  Upon closer inspection of these reviews, I am a bit wary of the validity for many of them.  The links are included here so you can make your own judgment.

I cannot honestly recommend this book to anyone, but it appears somebody out there likes it and in the end a review is simply one person’s opinion. So, if you are curious about this book, then by all means try the free sample and judge for yourself whether it is worth pursuing.  And if you do read the sample or the book, I’d really love to know what you think, either good or bad.

Rating:  1 – Not My Cuppa Tea (Did Not Finish)

Typos found: 12 or more (for first third of the book)

ETA:  Laurie left a comment on my Goodreads review that this book has been revamped since I received my review copy.  I'm not sure what the definition of "revamped" includes, but I will check the newest version against my notes.


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  1. I guess re-vamped means like re done kind of thing. The author is from the UK so they have pretty funny ways of saying sometimes.
    Hope this helps, awesome reviews you've got here on the whole site.

  2. Thanks, hope you found the reviews helpful.

    I'm familiar with UK spelling/wording and have read many UK authors, some with a very strong British style. This book was actually very non-UK in that respect.


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